11 jul. 2004

"The core of bees is alight with leaded peals"

Here's a nice, mostly iambic line by new formalist poet Clark Coolidge.

A nice sentence, too, with the same upward, right-tilting rhythm as the Garcilaso.

In the NP "the core of bees" is less prominent than verb phrase "is alight with leaded peals." Within this VP the verb itself is less prominent than the following elements, etc... The music of this line is exquisite: each content word is more prominent than the one that came before:

core ... bees ... alight ... leaded .... peals