tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post6157049654888618693..comments2023-08-29T02:42:23.063-05:00Comments on ¡Bemsha SWING!: 1st good paragraph I've written in a whileJonathanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09371893596402673898noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-80570532298675141362012-05-27T09:53:47.066-05:002012-05-27T09:53:47.066-05:00Good... but not yet great. It is precisely those n...Good... but not yet great. It is precisely those nasty little place-holding phrases that have to go in the revision.Jonathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09371893596402673898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-28226060674130936262012-05-27T09:46:52.072-05:002012-05-27T09:46:52.072-05:00Two phrases stick out for me: "in other words...Two phrases stick out for me: "in other words" and "in some sense."<br /><br />"In other words" seems superfluous, while "in some sense" hedges where a stronger statement is needed. Why not go all the way? "Kitsch is the dialectical opposite of modernism"?<br /><br />Such little phrases sure provide material for discussion!Andrew Shieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02804655739574694901noreply@blogger.com