tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post1620889285871738581..comments2023-08-29T02:42:23.063-05:00Comments on ¡Bemsha SWING!: Jonathanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09371893596402673898noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-71816405440664393042007-06-26T21:39:00.000-05:002007-06-26T21:39:00.000-05:00I appreciate especially the point about suggesting...I appreciate especially the point about suggesting instead of telling <I>or</I> showing. Something for me to keep working on.Joannie Stangelandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06006768246992875405noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-49167030122221797562007-06-25T18:00:00.000-05:002007-06-25T18:00:00.000-05:00I won't concede the word freedom to the admen. "A...I won't concede the word freedom to the admen. "As freedom is a breakfastfood..."Jonathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09371893596402673898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-49503023510307462322007-06-25T17:28:00.000-05:002007-06-25T17:28:00.000-05:00A good list of attributes. I'll quibble with 'free...A good list of attributes. I'll quibble with 'freedom' because it's a bit too bland or too washed-out a term.<BR/><BR/>And 'poemness' rather than 'poeminess'...the latter sounds like a tag word an ad man might coin.JforJameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17178504373218996278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-40132417211479183382007-06-25T08:15:00.000-05:002007-06-25T08:15:00.000-05:00I am not satisfied with endings that make a little...I am not satisfied with endings that make a little knot at the end in a predictable way... <BR/><BR/>I can't really explain disobedience, since it might be different for each person. For me it is a kind of fearlessness--not playing it safe.Jonathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09371893596402673898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-51968485652692144222007-06-25T05:52:00.000-05:002007-06-25T05:52:00.000-05:00That is a real nice set of points. I think a lot o...That is a real nice set of points. I think a lot of poets have the problem you identify your own work as having: not knowing how to end. <BR/><BR/>I sometimes think my poems stop to soon, as if I am good at setting things up but not good at developing their implications as far as they deserve to be developed.Andrew Shieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02804655739574694901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3759353.post-34560478601062025272007-06-25T05:50:00.000-05:002007-06-25T05:50:00.000-05:00Can you explain disobedient poem...sounds interest...Can you explain disobedient poem...sounds interesting.Thinkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08111322434232094665noreply@blogger.com